Take flight!
Everything rushing all around
me. I run and run and run
But never can escape.
To arms!
I fire everything I've got
As fiery blasts explode brightly,
Surrounding, consuming me in flames,
But leave no visible mark.
En garde!
I swing a mental rapier,
Slashing this way and that
In the impenetrable darkness that surrounds me
And yet I hear no clang, feel no resistance-
Just steel through empty air.
I try to run again,
But never fast enough,
For I cannot escape the the thought
Of you.
Pretty darn good for a guy who spurns unrhymed poetry. I love the parallelism of the first lines of each stanza, very clever. the third stanze is my favorite. great piece on the whole.
ReplyDeleteYes.. we're all going on a free verse streak. This is great, and we are all just a brilliant bunch here. I couldn't have asked for a better group of writers to come together on this blog.
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ReplyDeleteI like the feel of urgency that pervades the entire piece. It doesn't build to the climax; it pushes towards inexorably from the very start. And I'm with Braden.
ReplyDeleteAwesome pwnage of powerful imagery flinging me forward, yet nowhere.
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