What is the Stantonian Association of Interesting People?

My friends, this blog is dedicated to those men and women who go out of their way to be remarkably interesting. In other words, all of those fascinating Stanton students (or, in the rarest of cases, students from other schools) can join this blog to appreciate creative writing developed by us students. I, Braden Beaudreau, the creator of this blog, will post my past, present, and future works on this website, and those who join and comment will get the same opportunities. May all of you live in happiness and peace, and never forget: being interesting is the only way to stand out from the masses.

Sunday, November 27, 2011

I Look At You

I look at you, and I see
Pain. I see struggles beyond my reckoning.
I see a broken silhouette on the verge
Of despair. I see an opaque spirit praying
That light would be tangible, that the
Atmosphere would be more of a burden,
That reality could be a little more real.
I see a form begging for a soul,
A soul begging for redemption.

I look at you, and I hear
Helplessness in a cracking voice
As the edge gives way to the air,
As a stumble reaches the point of no return.
I see a free-fall with no destination, I see
Rage release, frustrations fizzle, sadness dissipate.
I see freedom from death, freedom from life.
I see the future, I see the past, the present;
I see you, I see me, her, him; I see
Miracles, with miraculous explanations;
I see expectations match reality.

I look at you, and I see
More beauty than I have ever seen before.

3 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed this.

    Some constructive criticism: The first stanza sounds a bit too prosey for the rest of the piece. Not that there is necessarily anything bad about that, but I think shortening in a few places could improve the early flow.
    Second, I like the end, but I feel like you could have made the twist more powerful some how.

    That being said, I enjoyed the piece and think it is quite good.

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  2. I feel like this is about having a baby.

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  3. It isn't... But I can see that, actually.

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